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She answered back with her back still turned away from me.
 
She answered back with her back still turned away from me.
   
"It's okay. My dad's gone with business engagement to São Tomé and Príncipe for a while"
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"It's okay. My dad's gone with business engagement to Santome Principle for a while"
   
 
"I see....."
 
"I see....."
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........It was truly a girl's room.
 
........It was truly a girl's room.
   
This was little different when I had gotten invited to Hime's room and now I'm nervous. Sweat was running down my back with weird tension. My virginity was making me act like a complete moron with bad nerves. It was totally out of control.
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This was little different when I had gotten invited to Hime's room and I'm being nervous. Sweat was running down my back with weird tension. My virginity that was making me act like a complete moron with bad nerves. It was totally out of control.
   
 
"Oh, where is Yuuki?"
 
"Oh, where is Yuuki?"
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"You had forgotten your bag from our study hall and I came to deliver it to you"
 
"You had forgotten your bag from our study hall and I came to deliver it to you"
   
The bag I gave him was placed right by their sofa.
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The bag I had given to him was placed right by their sofa.
   
 
"I guess you were really worried about me"
 
"I guess you were really worried about me"
   
"Of course. Kaoru was looking for you too, so make sure you send him a message"
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"Of course. Kaoru was looking for you too so make sure you send him a message"
   
 
The doorbell rang.
 
The doorbell rang.
   
Some man knocked on the door and demanded it open with a scraggly voice.
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Some men knocked on the door and demanded to open the door with scraggly voice.
   
 
"Th, that's my dad"
 
"Th, that's my dad"
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"H, hello"
 
"H, hello"
   
Yuuki was standing there with a towel wrapped around his waist in a changing room. That was why he wasn't in the living room, because he was taking a shower.
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Yuuki was standing there with a towel wrapped around his waist in a changing room. That was why he wasn't in the living room cause he was taking the shower.
   
"We've bumped into each other a lot tonight, Takkun-san"
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"We bump into each other a lot tonight, Ta-kkun san"
   
 
"My name is Eita Kidou"
 
"My name is Eita Kidou"
   
"Alright then, Eita-san. But what brought you here? You came to peep at me showering?"
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"Alright then, Eita-san. But what brought you here? You came to peep in my shower?"
   
He was getting smart. Was he really in 5th grade? When I was his age, I was busy rummaging for smut magazines by the river. You know what I was doing with them.
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He was getting smart. Was he really in 5th grade? When I was his age, I was busy ramaging for smut magazines by the river and you know what I was doing with them.
   
 
I heard her dad's voice behind the sliding door.
 
I heard her dad's voice behind the sliding door.
   
"Wh-, what happened to you? I thought you were away with business"
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" Wh, what happened to you? I thought you told me you were away with business"
   
 
"I forgot my important business documents. I had to miss one train because of it"
 
"I forgot my important business documents. I had to miss one train because of it"
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So it was located in Japan. Santome Principe, where in the world is this place?
 
So it was located in Japan. Santome Principe, where in the world is this place?
   
"By the way Ai, whose shoes are by the door?"
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"By the way Ai, who's shoes are they by the door?"
   
 
"I, I don't know. Probably Yuuki's"
 
"I, I don't know. Probably Yuuki's"
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"H, he is actually still growing every day, of course! That doesn't sound too far fetched"
 
"H, he is actually still growing every day, of course! That doesn't sound too far fetched"
   
I heard him go along with her story. He sounded very serious and sincere, just like his daughter. Ai-chan's square and straight trait must've come from him.
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I heard he had gone along with her story. He sounded very serious and sincere, just like his daughter. Ai-chan's square and straight trait must've come from him.
   
 
"I'm guessing my feet will grow bigger than yours in no time"
 
"I'm guessing my feet will grow bigger than yours in no time"
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"Yeah, thanks"
 
"Yeah, thanks"
   
"My sister brought home a man on Christmas night and that's pretty considerable.
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"My sister brought home a man on Christmas night and That's pretty considerable.
   
It's as if she skipped 2 steps forward to becoming a real woman."
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That is as if she skipped 2 steps forward to be a real woman?"
   
"No, we didn't skip anything!"
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"No, we didn't skip anything"
   
 
I shouted out at him.
 
I shouted out at him.
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Masuzu Natsukawa was trying to get in touch with me!
 
Masuzu Natsukawa was trying to get in touch with me!
   
"Ai. I hear a creepy sound, where is it coming from?"
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"Ai. I hear a creepy sound and I want to know where that is coming from?"
   
 
"Oh, I see. I hear it from the bathroom, maybe?"
 
"Oh, I see. I hear it from the bathroom, maybe?"
   
"I must have left my phone in the bathroom! A lot of phones these days are waterproof!"
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"The phone must be left in the bathroom! bA lot of phones these days are waterproof!"
   
I appreciated Ai-chan's attempt and I managed to put my phone in mute.
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I appreciated Ai-chan's attempt and I had managed to put my phone in mute.
   
 
That Masuzu. She always comes back around with perfect timing.
 
That Masuzu. She always comes back around with perfect timing.
   
"I guess now my father thinks I have a very bad taste in music"
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"I guess now my father had to think I have a very bad taste"
   
 
"S, sorry"
 
"S, sorry"
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Do I sense Masuzu's anger........?
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Do I sensed Masuzu's anger........?
   
 
I just delivered my delicious Tonjiru soup earlier for her.
 
I just delivered my delicious Tonjiru soup earlier for her.
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By all means, I couldn't call Masuzu from Ai-chan's house.
 
By all means, I couldn't call Masuzu from Ai-chan's house.
   
I turned my phone off.
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I had cut my phone off.
   
 
"Was it from some other girl?"
 
"Was it from some other girl?"
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"You were sweating profusely. Anyone could tell"
 
"You were sweating profusely. Anyone could tell"
   
I held my breath, thinking he needed to shut up already.
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I held my breath as I was thinking he needed to shut up already.
   
 
"Well I'm leaving now. I'll be back on New Year's Eve"
 
"Well I'm leaving now. I'll be back on New Year's Eve"
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"Ta-kkun, you may come out now"
 
"Ta-kkun, you may come out now"
   
I stepped out of stuffy bathroom into the hallway.
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I got out of stuffy bathroom to the hallway.
   
 
"Your dad seemed really nice"
 
"Your dad seemed really nice"
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"Yes, I know....."
 
"Yes, I know....."
   
She didn't look happy as she was standing there with the unwrapped packages.
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She didn't look happy as she was standing there with the unwrapped packages .
   
 
"I feel bad you had to lie for me"
 
"I feel bad you had to lie for me"
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I felt I was having a very adult conversation there.
 
I felt I was having a very adult conversation there.
   
"It's starting to look like an episode of a soap opera for you guys"
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"It's starting to look like an episode from soap opera for you guys"
   
Yuuki came out with his pajamas on. He only spoke casually to his own family, I guess.
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Yuuki came out with his pajamas on. He spoke casually to his own family only, I guess.
   
"Quit teasing me and go to sleep already. Don't you have sports practice in the morning?"
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"Quit teasing me and go to sleep already. Don't you have a sports practice in the morning?"
   
 
"Yeah, but I wanted to stay up to see what might go down tonight"
 
"Yeah, but I wanted to stay up to see what might go down tonight"
   
"No, don't be silly and just go to bed now"
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"No, don't be silly and just get in the bed now"
   
He laughed all the way to his room. Now I was able to see the side of him that was like a fifth grader.
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He laughed all the way to his room. Yes now I was able to see his different side of him being in
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5th grade.
   
 
"Let me apologize for my brother's attitude"
 
"Let me apologize for my brother's attitude"
   
"But he has very good manners"
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"But he has a very good manner"
   
 
"My mother had made sure of it"
 
"My mother had made sure of it"
   
Not only was she sweet but very well-mannered.
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Not only she was sweet but very well-mannered.
   
 
It was unlike my rotten mother.
 
It was unlike my rotten mother.
   
"Ta-kkun, you must've been sweating all day? Just go ahead, take a bath and wash it all off"
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"Ta-kkun, you must've been sweating all day? Just go ahead and take a bath and wash all off"
   
 
"You don't mind if I get in first?"
 
"You don't mind if I get in first?"
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I borrowed her father's pajamas.
 
I borrowed her father's pajamas.
   
His papers were filed randomly in his bookcases and there wasn't even a strand of hair on the floor. I didn't even smell cigarette smoke in there. Clean sheets. I felt a lot of love from Ai-chan who had kept up with this room.
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His paperwork were placed randomly in his bookcases and there was not even a strand of hair on the floor. I didn't even smell cigarette smoke in there. Clean sheets. I felt a lot of love from
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Ai-chan who had kept up with this room.
   
 
I breathed out in the bed.
 
I breathed out in the bed.
   
This must've been the most chaotic Christmas in my 16 years of life.
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This must've been the most chaotic Christmas in 16 years of my life.
   
I wonder if my mom was home.
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I wonder if my mom was in my house.
   
I could never agree with her idea to let her move back in with me after she had ditched her boyfriend.
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I could never agree with her idea and move back in with me after she had ditched her boyfriend.
   
NO WAY. I swore off romance altogether just to avoid this kind of Romance-Brain induced behavior.
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NO WAY. I despised romance all together just to avoid this kind of Romance-Brain induced behavior.
   
But that exact thing made Ai-chan cry.
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But the exact thing made Ai-chan cry.
   
 
There was a knock on the door.
 
There was a knock on the door.
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"You s, sleep in here!? I don't think it's a good idea!"
 
"You s, sleep in here!? I don't think it's a good idea!"
   
I again panicked like a typical cherry boy. Calm yourself down a little bit, Eita Kidou. What happened to the smartest boy in his class?
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I, again panicked like a typical cherry boy. Calm yourself down a little bit, Eita Kidou. What happened to the smartest boy in his class?
   
 
But she ignored it and crawled into my bed anyway.
 
But she ignored it and crawled into my bed anyway.
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"Excuse me"
 
"Excuse me"
   
"I said that's not a good idea!"
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"I said that was not a good idea!"
   
 
I turned my back away from her.
 
I turned my back away from her.
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It was so very warm.
 
It was so very warm.
   
"I just can't celebrate you and Chiwa as a couple. I need to be honest even though it might make you hate me. Those are my true feelings."
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"I just can't celebrate you and Chiwa as a couple. I must be honest even though that might make you hate mel But that's my true feeling"
   
 
".........."
 
".........."
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Her words made me realize one thing.
 
Her words made me realize one thing.
   
What if I kept my no-romance attitude all through my life until I die.
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What if I kept my no-romance attitude all through my single life till I die.
   
 
Then I wonder what Ai-chan would do?
 
Then I wonder what Ai-chan would do?
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Would she stay alone forever for me?
 
Would she stay alone forever for me?
   
Or would she give up on me and find somebody else instead?
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Or she might give up on me and find somebody else instead?
   
 
I vaguely imagined that she might pick the latter.
 
I vaguely imagined that she might pick the latter.
   
Romance is nothing but a phase, like a fever. She should forget about me after graduation.
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Romance is nothing but a phase, like a fever. She should forget about me after her graduation.
   
 
But I was starting to think otherwise.
 
But I was starting to think otherwise.
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".....Yes"
 
".....Yes"
   
"She was like that, but up until I was in grade school my parents were deeply in love, like an ideal couple. But after they fell out of love, all that mess had happened.
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"She was like that still but up until I was in grade school, my parents were so much in love, like an ideal couple. But after they fell out of love, all that mess had happened.
   
"That made you not believe in love anymore is your excuse?"
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"That made you not believing in love anymore is your excuse?"
   
 
"Yup"
 
"Yup"
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I was so confused.
 
I was so confused.
   
"Me, ending up with Chiwa? No way. I consider her as my little sister and do love her like one, but I never had any romantic feelings."
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"Me, ending up with Chiwa? No way. I consider her as my little sister and do love her like my own, but I never had any romantic feeling."
   
 
"What is the difference? Why do you try to separate them?"
 
"What is the difference? Why do you try to separate them?"
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"I don't like anybody. I will never fall in love"
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"I don't like anybody. I would never fall in love"
   
   
 
Ai-chan had gotten out of the bed.
 
Ai-chan had gotten out of the bed.
   
"If that's so then I don't know whether to give up or not."
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"If that's so then I don't know if I should give up or not."
   
 
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It looked rough but thick and warmly knitted.
 
It looked rough but thick and warmly knitted.
   
"You have to keep it after doing this to me. You don't have to wear it in front of Chiwa."
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"You are to keep it for doing this to me. You don't have to wear it in front of Chiwa."
   
 
"Thank you,"
 
"Thank you,"

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