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Claire Rouge was stuffing a cream bun down her throat.
 
Claire Rouge was stuffing a cream bun down her throat.
   
It was a sight unusual for her, who took it as a creed— that nobles are always elegant.
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It was an unusual behavior for her, who took it as a creed— that nobles are always elegant.
   
 
"Don't binge, you'll get fat you know."
 
"Don't binge, you'll get fat you know."
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"It can't be helped. We were matched up with a superior team. "
 
"It can't be helped. We were matched up with a superior team. "
   
"That may be true... but strength-wise, we are definitively better than them."
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"That may be true... but we are also a lot stronger than them."
   
Claire gnawed her lip. Although they were at a disadvantage in numbers, she seemed to be unable to come to terms with losing to lower rank opponents.
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Claire gnawed her lip. Although they were at a disadvantage in numbers, she seemed to be unable to understand and accept losing to lower rank oponents.
   
 
It was certain that as elementalists they were superior.
 
It was certain that as elementalists they were superior.
   
The reason they lost was their inability to execute proper coordination with each other. Claire overestimated her strength and chased her enemies too far in, and Kamito too could not rely on her in a dire situation.
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However, because their teamwork lacked, they were defeated. Claire over-relied on her strength, chasing her enemies too far and Kamito too could not depend on the girl in a dire situation.
   
It was not possible to win with just the queen piece— in other words, their situation was something like that.
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In other words, it was not possible to win with just the queen piece.
   
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"Even if we lost, we shouldn’t hesitate at a time like this..."
"Despite that it's not the time to be stumbling about now..."
 
   
There was a reason Claire was impatient to the point like she was binge eating the buns.
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There was a reason Claire was stuffing herself with buns as if she was in a hurry.
   
 
The regulations of the Blade Dance held in two months were different from the individual battles three years ago, if they didn’t put together a five-member team, they wouldn’t be able to take part in it. In addition, only the top three teams decided by the inter-school competition could participate from Areishia Spirit Academy.
 
The regulations of the Blade Dance held in two months were different from the individual battles three years ago, if they didn’t put together a five-member team, they wouldn’t be able to take part in it. In addition, only the top three teams decided by the inter-school competition could participate from Areishia Spirit Academy.
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Kamito, who started attending the school just a while ago, had no achievements that could raise his ranking.
 
Kamito, who started attending the school just a while ago, had no achievements that could raise his ranking.
   
To raise it, one had to win a formal practice match like the one from this morning or complete a task assigned by the academy; however, he had done neither.
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To raise it, one had to win a formal practice match like the one from this morning or complete a task assigned by the academy; however, he had done nothing of the like like .
   
Defeating the giant spirit the other day, dueling with Sylphid Knights captain Ellis Fahrengart or even battling the frenzied demon spirit, those were all informal battles and did not reflect on the rankings.
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Defeating the giant spirit the other day, dueling with Sylphid Knight's captain Ellis Fahrengart or even battling the frenzied demon spirit, those were all informal battles and did not reflect on the rankings.
   
On the other hand, Claire, who should have towered above the rest and been superior as an elementalist—
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It was especially surprising that Claire, who, as an elementalist, was supposed to tower above the rest in power, had the lowest results in the class.
   
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There could be only one reason for that. '''It was because she was doing everything alone'''.
Had shockingly the lowest results in the class.
 
   
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She failed when she took the tasks that should be originally completed by a team and she was defeated when she challenged upper classmen alone in a championship match. If she did such a thing, no matter how strong she was, there was no way her ranking could raise.
There could be only one reason for that. ''It was because she was doing every mission alone''.
 
 
She failed when she attempted the missions that should be originally completed by a team and she was defeated when she challenged upper classmen alone in a championship match. As long as she did such a thing, no matter how strong she was, there was no way her ranking could raise.
 
   
 
There was a reason Claire was isolated from the rest of the academy.
 
There was a reason Claire was isolated from the rest of the academy.
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Rubia Elstein.
 
Rubia Elstein.
   
Four years ago, while she had the position of Queen serving the fire Elemental Lord, she betrayed him, disappeared, and brought about an unprecedented great disaster to the empire. Because of that others started calling her The Calamity Queen.<!--TL-revisit one day-->
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Four years ago, while she had the position of Queen serving the fire Elemental Lord, she betrayed him, disappeared, and brought about an unprecedented great disaster to the empire. Because of that others started calling her The Calamity Queen.
   
 
As her younger sister, Claire was looked at with contempt and fear by the majority of the academy students.
 
As her younger sister, Claire was looked at with contempt and fear by the majority of the academy students.
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—It's not the time to be stumbling about now.
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—Now was not the time to hesitate.
   
 
Blood-oozing emotions filled Claire's rough words.
 
Blood-oozing emotions filled Claire's rough words.
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At first, he just came to the academy due to Greyworth's request, but now he clearly had a reason to regain his strength from three years ago.
 
At first, he just came to the academy due to Greyworth's request, but now he clearly had a reason to regain his strength from three years ago.
   
Darkness Spirit Restia—his former contracted spirit.<!--I know, I know. TL-revisit one day-->
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That reason being his former contracted spirit- Restia.
   
That reason was to take her back with his own hands.
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He wanted to take her back with his own hands.
   
 
The girl who, for the first time, brought light to Kamito's life, which was shrouded in darkness before.
 
The girl who, for the first time, brought light to Kamito's life, which was shrouded in darkness before.
   
And also the girl who gave a heartbroken Claire the frenzy spirit and tried to drive the giant spirit mad in the middle of the town.
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And the same girl who gave a heartbroken Claire the frenzy spirit and tried to drive the giant spirit mad in the middle of the town.
   
He met her again, but she was vastly different from the one Kamito once knew.
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He met her again, but she was different from the one Kamito once knew.
   
 
—What on earth happened to her?
 
—What on earth happened to her?
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"Did you forget to put sugar into your coffee?"
 
"Did you forget to put sugar into your coffee?"
   
Claire and Est peered at his face with a worried look.
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Claire and Est peered at him with a worried look.
   
 
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Kamito quickly averted his eyes from the ruby pupils that peered in his own.
 
Kamito quickly averted his eyes from the ruby pupils that peered in his own.
   
"...Well… Fine. But tell me everything when you feel like it."
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"...Well… The fact is... I don’t want to talk about it now."
   
 
Claire did not try to pry deeper. Despite her arrogance, there were, occasionally, times when she showed consideration.
 
Claire did not try to pry deeper. Despite her arrogance, there were, occasionally, times when she showed consideration.
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Her very appearance was of a noble ojou-sama.
 
Her very appearance was of a noble ojou-sama.
   
Her milky white skin was smooth like silk and her emerald eyes locked a faint glow in them.
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Her milky white skin was smooth like silk and her emerald eyes, which were locked on him, radiated a faint glow.
   
The way she brushed her hair aside with one hand at her side looked strangely good.
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The way she brushed her hair aside looked strangely good.
   
 
Rinslet Laurenfrost.
 
Rinslet Laurenfrost.
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Due to her rivalry with Claire, she was trying to make Kamito her manservant. She was a troubling ojou-sama.
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Due to her rivalry with Claire, she was trying to make Kamito her manservant. She was troubling ojou-sama.
   
 
Right beside her was—
 
Right beside her was—
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"Fufu, what a delicious smell."
 
"Fufu, what a delicious smell."
   
A girl dressed in a maid uniform. She had a gentle smile on her lips as she stood there.
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A girl dressed in a maid uniform. She had a gentle smile on her lips as she stood there, wearing a long skirt with a lot of neat frills attached. Her hair was cut into short bobs and she had a lovely white brim on her head.
 
She was wearing a long skirt with a lot of neat frills attached. Her hair was cut into short bobs and she had a lovely white brim on her head.
 
   
 
She was Rinslet's personal maid, Carol.
 
She was Rinslet's personal maid, Carol.
   
Kamito didn’t know why there was a maid in the academy, but she was the only one he saw here. So, it would certainly have been an exception made for the Laurenfrost family.
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Kamito didn’t know why there was a maid in the academy, but she was the only one he saw here. It seemed that Laurenfrost family, as an exception, was allowed to bring a servant.
   
 
"...Why did you come here, Rinslet?"
 
"...Why did you come here, Rinslet?"
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"Yeah, I hear it's a daughter of noble of high social standing."
 
"Yeah, I hear it's a daughter of noble of high social standing."
   
"Hmm, but even if we're talking about social status in this academy, there's the Fahrengart family and the Laurenfrost family... Isn't it like a bargain sale of nobles?"
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"Hmm, but even if we're talking about social status in this academy, there's the Fahrengart family and the Laurenfrost family... What’s with all this nobles gathering here?"
   
 
"Hey! Would you please not lump the militaristic Fahrengart family with the true pedigree Laurenfrost family?"
 
"Hey! Would you please not lump the militaristic Fahrengart family with the true pedigree Laurenfrost family?"

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