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"to discover" doesn't have a tense so it conflicts with the past tense used in the verbs "I came...", "were moved out...", "was going around...", etc. I swithced "to discover" back to "discovered" to be consistent with the past tense. |
"to discover" doesn't have a tense so it conflicts with the past tense used in the verbs "I came...", "were moved out...", "was going around...", etc. I swithced "to discover" back to "discovered" to be consistent with the past tense. |
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Revision as of 09:23, 19 April 2006
Chapter 1
Good job spotting all those little things. I didn't even think to convert "Fifth class" to "class 1-5". There are a few changes you made that I changed:
Line 195 "Once I came to the classroom in the morning and to discover that all the tables were moved out to the corridor, or printed stars on the school roof; another time she was going around the school pasting curse papers all over the place...you know, those Chinese vampire ones where you paste the paper talisman on a vampire's forehead. I just can't understand her."
"to discover" doesn't have a tense so it conflicts with the past tense used in the verbs "I came...", "were moved out...", "was going around...", etc. I swithced "to discover" back to "discovered" to be consistent with the past tense.
Baltakatei 00:23, 19 April 2006 (PDT)
