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Have you ever wished you existed twice?
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Have you ever wished that you existed twice?
   
I'm not talking about twins or anything. I mean a second "you" who can stand in for you.
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I'm not talking about twins or anything like that. I’m talking about a second "you" who can stand in for you.<!--ntsgrrarr-->
   
Come to think of it, there was a ''copy-robot'' in that famous anime show<ref>Perman (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Perman)</ref> I used to watch when I was a child.
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Come to think of it, there was a ''copy-robot'' in a famous anime show<ref>Perman (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Perman)</ref> that I used to watch when I was a child.
   
The protagonist made the robot go to elementary school in his place while he acted as a mysterious super hero. It was a robot with excellent capabilities that would share the memories while active with him and had his own will.
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In order to act as a mysterious superhero, the protagonist made the robot go to elementary school in his place. The robot had some amazing abilities: it had free will, would act independently, and could then share its memories with the protagonist.<!--mild libedit-grr-->
   
If you really had something like that, you could make him do your homework when you're tired, or make him go to school when you don't feel like going yourself, or make him earn money for you to spend<!-- Is there a word specifically for spending money for personal amusement? Like game center and stuff. "squander" seems too, wasteful? -->.
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If you had access to something like that, you could make it do your homework when you felt tired, go to school when you weren’t in the mood, or earn money for you to fritter away on whatever you wanted<!-- Is there a word specifically for spending money for personal amusement? Like game center and stuff. "squander" seems too, wasteful? --><!--fritter feels closer to what you want (imho). Also, “blow” works as a more casual word, but needs slightly different sentence structure. –grr-->.
   
 
Aah, that would be so convenient.
 
Aah, that would be so convenient.
   
Admittedly, it's not like that doesn't positively sound like pretty nasty slave-driving to me, but nothing to worry about in that respect. After all, you share all fun things and unfun things at the end of the day.
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It does sound like you’d be acting like a pretty nasty slave-driver, but that’s not really the case. After all, the two of you share everything - fun and not-so-fun<!--not fond of unfun. Solution 1: tedious, boring, etc. Solution 2: not-so-fun EEE: pick your poison? –grrarr->- at the end of the day.<!--EEE: do you mean the memory-merge, specifically? –grrarr-->
   
Mh? Then take on the unfun stuff yourself, you say?
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Mh? Then take on the not-so-fun stuff yourself, you say?
   
...Now that's an entirely different matter.
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...Now that's an entirely different matter.<!--just throwing it out there: “whole other kettle of fish?-grrarr-->
   
But well, no use lingering over dreams. That would be too good to be true, and if it were true, then there would be bound to be some sort of a catch.
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Well, there’s no point in daydreaming. Possessing something like that would be too good to be true, and even if it were possible, there’d bound to be some kind of catch.
   
   
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"I'm back."
 
"I'm back."
   
"Ya," I said as I paused the game I was playing and turned around to the person who had just entered the room.
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"Ya," I said as I paused the game I was playing and turned to the person who had just entered the room.
   
It was a high schooler, and because he had just come from school, he was still wearing his uniform and carrying the satchel designated by the school. His short haircut, his sun-tanned skin, and his strong build implied that he did sports.
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It was a high school student. He had just come back from school, so he was still wearing his uniform and carrying the official school satchel. His short haircut, sun-tanned skin, and strong build suggested that he was the sporty sort. <!--also, avid sportsman, played a lot of sports, etc-grr-->
   
If there was a third party here, he would have been flabbergasted for sure.
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If there were a third person in the room, he would have been flabbergasted.
   
The face of that student looked the same as mine. Not similar. The same.
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The face of that student looked identical to mine. Not similar, but the exact same.
   
And not only our faces were the same—our body size, our haircut, the breadth across our shoulders, our weight, our skin tone, the length of our legs, our shoe size—everything.
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And our faces weren’t the only things that were identical—our body sizes, haircuts, shoulder widths, weights, skin tones, leg lengths, shoe sizes—everything was the same.
   
We weren't twins. Twins look similar, not identical.
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We weren't identical twins<!--avoid the fraternal mess-grr-->. Even so-called “identical” twins look similar at best, and aren’t actually identical.
   
Our appearance, however, looked the exact same.
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Our appearances, however, were exactly the same in every respect.
   
Like my mirror image.
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He was like my mirror image, which is why I called him "copy."
 
Which is why I called him "copy."
 
   
 
"Give me the satchel."
 
"Give me the satchel."
   
After receiving the satchel from my copy, I rummaged it for a mangas that came out today. I had commanded him to buy it for me on his way home. When I took the manga out, I accidentally pulled along a sheet of paper, which then fell to the ground.
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After taking the satchel from my copy, I rummaged in it for a manga that had just come out today. I had commanded him to buy it for me on his way home. When I took the manga out, I accidentally snagged a sheet of paper, which then fell to the ground.
   
 
"What's that?"
 
"What's that?"
   
"The answer sheet of a short test. The one I told you about yesterday."
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"The results<-- “answer sheet” could be confusing—grr--> from the quiz I told you about yesterday."
   
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"Did you mention it to me?"
"You did?"
 
   
I took a look at it. Next to my name, Jirou Kishitani, was a 100. It was a literal full mark.
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I took a look at it. Next to my name, Jirou Kishitani, was a 100. It was literally a perfect score.<!--I changed it from “literal full mark” – is there some nuance you’re trying to capture w/the “literal/ly”?-grr-->
   
 
"Not bad at all."
 
"Not bad at all."
   
"The test covered the things we studied yesterday. It paid off, didn't it?"
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"The test covered the stuff we studied yesterday. It paid off, didn't it?"
   
 
"You're the one who studied, though."
 
"You're the one who studied, though."
   
(But the esteem is mine. Heh, looks like I can look forward to my school report this year.)
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(But I get all the credit. Heh, looks like I can look forward to my report card this year.)
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I tossed the sheet away and threw myself onto my bed with the new manga. My copy picked up the sheet and sat down where I had been sitting.
   
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"Oh? You made a lot of progress, didn't you?" escaped his lips<!--this doesn’t really work. “he said” would work, but loses the “escaped his lips nuance”-grr-->as he looked at the TV screen.
I tossed the sheet away and threw myself on my bed with the new manga. My copy picked up the sheet and sat down where I had been sitting.
 
   
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I’d been gaming all day while my copy was at school. Of course I made some decent progress.
"Oh? You made quite some progress, didn't you?" escaped his lips as he looked into the TV screen.
 
   
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‘Cause both my parents work from the early morning ‘till<!-- this guy speaks rather bluntly/crudely even in his monologues -EEE --> late at night, there's no one who would bitch at me for skipping school. No, I was at school, I guess? Or rather, my copy was. But practically it's the same.<!--EEE: does he mean 1:But it's practically the same thing. 2:Practically speaking, it’s the same thing?-grr-->
Well, I had been playing all day while my copy was at school. Of course I made some decent progress.
 
   
Because both my parents work from the early morning till<!-- this guy speaks rather bluntly/crudely even in his monologues -EEE --> late at night, There's no one who would rebuke me for skipping school. No, I was at school, I guess? Or rather, my copy was. But practically it's the same.
 
   
 
"Train my characters while I'm reading this manga!"
 
"Train my characters while I'm reading this manga!"
 
[[Image:Tsukumodo_V2_93.jpg|400px|right]]
 
[[Image:Tsukumodo_V2_93.jpg|400px|right]]
   
"I don't mind, but let's share our memory before you start reading manga."
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"I don't mind, but let's share our memories before you start reading manga."
   
My copy referred to himself as "boku"<ref>Look it up.</ref>. Of course only when he's with me. I had also made him change his way of speaking a little. It would feel much more awkward if we talked the exact same. When I talked to him with those slight changes, I didn't get the feeling like I was talking to myself and could relax.
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My copy refers to himself as "boku,"<ref>Look it up.</ref> but that’s only when he's with me, of course. I had also made him change his manner of speaking a bit. I would feel really awkward if we talked the exact same way. After those small tweaks, I no longer felt like I was talking to myself and could relax.
   
My copy got on the bed, covered my body <!-- like this http://nurutya.web.fc2.com/48/26.jpg --> and touched my forehead with his.
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My copy got on the bed, lay on top of me <!-- like this http://nurutya.web.fc2.com/48/26.jpg -->and touched his forehead to mine.
   
It was a sight that could be easily misunderstood. But we weren't doing anything questionable; this was how I could turn the memories of my copy into my own.
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It was a sight that could easily be misunderstood. But we weren't doing anything questionable; this was how I could turn the memories of my copy into my own.
   
When I collected myself, I felt something flowing into my head. It was the memories my copy had experienced that day.
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While I collected myself, I felt something flowing into my head. It was the memories my copy had experienced that day.
   
I saw how he went to school and attended classes. He surprised everyone with the full mark he had received in the short test. Figures—I haven't gotten a full mark in my entire life. No wonder, because I never did my homework properly, let alone prepared myself for school. It was kind of funny to see the reactions of the teacher and the other students.
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I saw that he went to school and attended classes. He surprised everyone with the full mark he had received on the short test. Figures—I haven't gotten a full mark in my entire life. That’s unsurprising, because I never did my homework properly, let alone prepared myself properly for school. It was kind of funny to see the reactions of the teacher and the other students.
   
There was also a scene of my club activities where he played soccer. I saw him score a goal in a practice game they played together with the first team. The goal keeper was a guy from the first team I couldn't stand. He was gnashing his teeth. Glorious. After that, my copy went to a convenience store, bought my manga, and came here.
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There was also a scene that stood out from my club activities, where he played soccer. I saw him score a goal in a practice game that was being played against the first-string team.<!--libedit-grr--> The goalie was a guy from the first-string team who I couldn't stand. He was gnashing his teeth. Glorious. After that, my copy went to a convenience store, bought my manga, and came home.
   
"Man, you rock," I had to praise him after seeing that test and his play.
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"Man, you rock." I had to praise him after seeing that test score and his soccer playing.
   
My copy removed himself from me and smiled wryly.
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My copy got off me and smiled wryly.
   
 
"Is that self-praise?"
 
"Is that self-praise?"
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"Oh, looks like it is. You're me after all, aren't you?"
 
"Oh, looks like it is. You're me after all, aren't you?"
   
I couldn't explain what in earth he was.
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I couldn't explain what on earth he was.
   
 
I could only say that he was my copy.
 
I could only say that he was my copy.
   
A copy that looked the same as me and had the same skills. Who did things like going to school for me, studying for me, and training my game characters for me.
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A copy that looked the same as me and had the same skills. One who did things like going to school, studying, and training my game characters for me.
   
 
It's like there were two of me.
 
It's like there were two of me.
   
But while he was me, he wasn't me.
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But while he was me, he somehow wasn't me.
   
He was a version of mine who obeyed whatever I commanded him.
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He was a version of me who had to obey my every command.
   
 
What a convenient tool I had gotten my hands on.
 
What a convenient tool I had gotten my hands on.
   
With him, I could do whatever I want. I didn't have to trudge to anything anymore.
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I could do whatever I wanted. I didn't have to trudge to anything anymore.<!--EEE:a bit awkward – might need a less literal rework, or additional clarification?-grr-->
   
Ever since I had obtained that tool, my life was fulfilled.
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Ever since I had obtained that tool, my life had been fulfilled.
   
The scene I was reading wasn't particularly funny, but I couldn't stop laughing.
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The manga scene I was reading wasn't particularly funny, but I couldn't stop laughing.
   
 
Ah, right. Gotta make him do today's homework.
 
Ah, right. Gotta make him do today's homework.

Revision as of 04:59, 20 August 2012

Have you ever wished that you existed twice?

I'm not talking about twins or anything like that. I’m talking about a second "you" who can stand in for you.

Come to think of it, there was a copy-robot in a famous anime show[1] that I used to watch when I was a child.

In order to act as a mysterious superhero, the protagonist made the robot go to elementary school in his place. The robot had some amazing abilities: it had free will, would act independently, and could then share its memories with the protagonist.

If you had access to something like that, you could make it do your homework when you felt tired, go to school when you weren’t in the mood, or earn money for you to fritter away on whatever you wanted.

Aah, that would be so convenient.

It does sound like you’d be acting like a pretty nasty slave-driver, but that’s not really the case. After all, the two of you share everything - fun and not-so-fun

Mh? Then take on the not-so-fun stuff yourself, you say?

...Now that's an entirely different matter.

Well, there’s no point in daydreaming. Possessing something like that would be too good to be true, and even if it were possible, there’d bound to be some kind of catch.


"I'm back."

"Ya," I said as I paused the game I was playing and turned to the person who had just entered the room.

It was a high school student. He had just come back from school, so he was still wearing his uniform and carrying the official school satchel. His short haircut, sun-tanned skin, and strong build suggested that he was the sporty sort.

If there were a third person in the room, he would have been flabbergasted.

The face of that student looked identical to mine. Not similar, but the exact same.

And our faces weren’t the only things that were identical—our body sizes, haircuts, shoulder widths, weights, skin tones, leg lengths, shoe sizes—everything was the same.

We weren't identical twins. Even so-called “identical” twins look similar at best, and aren’t actually identical.

Our appearances, however, were exactly the same in every respect.

He was like my mirror image, which is why I called him "copy."

"Give me the satchel."

After taking the satchel from my copy, I rummaged in it for a manga that had just come out today. I had commanded him to buy it for me on his way home. When I took the manga out, I accidentally snagged a sheet of paper, which then fell to the ground.

"What's that?"

"The results<-- “answer sheet” could be confusing—grr--> from the quiz I told you about yesterday."

"Did you mention it to me?"

I took a look at it. Next to my name, Jirou Kishitani, was a 100. It was literally a perfect score.

"Not bad at all."

"The test covered the stuff we studied yesterday. It paid off, didn't it?"

"You're the one who studied, though."

(But I get all the credit. Heh, looks like I can look forward to my report card this year.)

I tossed the sheet away and threw myself onto my bed with the new manga. My copy picked up the sheet and sat down where I had been sitting.

"Oh? You made a lot of progress, didn't you?" escaped his lipsas he looked at the TV screen.

I’d been gaming all day while my copy was at school. Of course I made some decent progress.

‘Cause both my parents work from the early morning ‘till late at night, there's no one who would bitch at me for skipping school. No, I was at school, I guess? Or rather, my copy was. But practically it's the same.


"Train my characters while I'm reading this manga!"

Tsukumodo V2 93.jpg

"I don't mind, but let's share our memories before you start reading manga."

My copy refers to himself as "boku,"[2] but that’s only when he's with me, of course. I had also made him change his manner of speaking a bit. I would feel really awkward if we talked the exact same way. After those small tweaks, I no longer felt like I was talking to myself and could relax.

My copy got on the bed, lay on top of me and touched his forehead to mine.

It was a sight that could easily be misunderstood. But we weren't doing anything questionable; this was how I could turn the memories of my copy into my own.

While I collected myself, I felt something flowing into my head. It was the memories my copy had experienced that day.

I saw that he went to school and attended classes. He surprised everyone with the full mark he had received on the short test. Figures—I haven't gotten a full mark in my entire life. That’s unsurprising, because I never did my homework properly, let alone prepared myself properly for school. It was kind of funny to see the reactions of the teacher and the other students.

There was also a scene that stood out from my club activities, where he played soccer. I saw him score a goal in a practice game that was being played against the first-string team. The goalie was a guy from the first-string team who I couldn't stand. He was gnashing his teeth. Glorious. After that, my copy went to a convenience store, bought my manga, and came home.

"Man, you rock." I had to praise him after seeing that test score and his soccer playing.

My copy got off me and smiled wryly.

"Is that self-praise?"

"Oh, looks like it is. You're me after all, aren't you?"

I couldn't explain what on earth he was.

I could only say that he was my copy.

A copy that looked the same as me and had the same skills. One who did things like going to school, studying, and training my game characters for me.

It's like there were two of me.

But while he was me, he somehow wasn't me.

He was a version of me who had to obey my every command.

What a convenient tool I had gotten my hands on.

I could do whatever I wanted. I didn't have to trudge to anything anymore.

Ever since I had obtained that tool, my life had been fulfilled.

The manga scene I was reading wasn't particularly funny, but I couldn't stop laughing.

Ah, right. Gotta make him do today's homework.