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I think I put brackets because I was considering rewriting that part. The two lines are sort of connected but I can't seem to transfer it well into English unless I break up the sentence,
 
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"In an acrobatic display of leaping and latching onto one of Ryuuji’s arms, Taiga had landed a crab scissors move somewhere between his waist and thigh with her bare feet and climbed onto him."


I realize that you're trying to connect 'acrobatic display' with the actions of leaping and latching, but it comes off as an awkward sentence. Suggestion:
In an acrobatic display, Taiga leaped up and latched onto one of Ryuuji’s arms, landing a crab-scissors move somewhere between his waist and thigh with her bare feet while climbing onto him.
--[[User:Akirasav|Akirasav]] 14:20, 9 October 2008 (PDT)

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