Difference between revisions of "Talk:Baka to Tesuto to Syokanju:Volume10.5 Me and Yuuji and the Dangerous Black Magic"

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Noted. Second part is valid though.--[[User:Teh Ping|Teh Ping]] ([[User talk:Teh Ping|talk]]) 07:56, 19 April 2013 (CDT)
 
Noted. Second part is valid though.--[[User:Teh Ping|Teh Ping]] ([[User talk:Teh Ping|talk]]) 07:56, 19 April 2013 (CDT)
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'I dash through the crowd that’s moving to the school casually, change my shoes and F class.'
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This line makes it sound like Akihisa changed his class. It should be 'entered F class' or something. Other than that everything seems fine. Thanks for the hard work. [[User:Nick Halden|Nick Halden]] ([[User talk:Nick Halden|talk]]) 16:07, 2 May 2013 (CDT)

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(The 'We saw yesterday' paragraph may be missing a double-quotation mark at the beginning; 'we must avoid looking at him' looks as though it should be reversed ('we must avoid him looking at us'?) from the context, since him observing them is the dangerous part. *enjoys the story!*)

Noted. Second part is valid though.--Teh Ping (talk) 07:56, 19 April 2013 (CDT)

'I dash through the crowd that’s moving to the school casually, change my shoes and F class.' This line makes it sound like Akihisa changed his class. It should be 'entered F class' or something. Other than that everything seems fine. Thanks for the hard work. Nick Halden (talk) 16:07, 2 May 2013 (CDT)