Talk:Date A Live:Volume 2 Chapter 5

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• It was the final strike, because each attack holds lethal powers respectively. If not for the AstralDress, they could fish out the results of Yoshino being killed around 100 times; it was the incarnation of killing intent and malice.

They were final strikes, because each attack held a lethal level of power respectively. If not for the AstralDress, they would result in Yoshino being killed over a 100 times; it was the incarnation of killing intent and malice.

fish out sounds weird, it could be a typo if you meant something like "finish off"

• "—Okay, let's this up all the way."

this is missing something. "—Okay, let's ___ this up all the way." finish? // "—Okay, let's keep this offense up all the way."

"Hurry and finish increasing her affection level, and give a her kiss."

"………………Uhh."

………………It was a specific way to say it out of the mouth, Shidou became a little shy from that.

The bit in bold is awkward sounding, understand what you mean but you might see try posting up the jap-text to see how others would translate the line. I would suggest something like …The instructions were so blunt and direct that Shidou became a little shy.

• The shot grazed Yoshino's shoulder tip and her cheeks, and continue on passing through her back.

The shot implies only one bullet/beam was fired, but it manages to graze her shoulder AND her cheekS. Through her back implies she was hit directly as well...I guess you mean The shots grazed Yoshino's shoulder tip and her cheeks, and continued passed behind her.

She clenched her teeth, and her eye roots --eye lids suit tightly? approached to each other, while she was almost close to crying, she continued kicking the floor. --Drowzycow (talk)

"—Okay, let's this up all the way." <---she's saying keep this pace going. she was already attacking so she didnt say it.

………………It was a specific way to say it out of the mouth, Shidou became a little shy from that. ~you can use "that was quite a way to put it" he was stating that "the hurry up and increase affection" was ridiculous in some sorts sooo.......--RikiNutcase (talk) 18:33, 20 November 2012 (CST)

It was the final strike, because each attack holds lethal powers respectively. If not for the AstralDress, they could fish out the results of Yoshino being killed around 100 times; it was the incarnation of killing intent and malice. <---the attacks are from separate members into one strike. --RikiNutcase(talk)

The problem I had with the line lies more with the fish out the results bit of the line. Like I mentioned possible typo of fish=finish comes to mind--Drowzycow (talk) 19:06, 20 November 2012 (CST)

• The moment it touched the ammunition, it would get covered in ice and even the firepower would freeze before falling to the ground.

What did you mean by firepower here? Since it seems to be different from the ammunition (which would be missiles/bullets) but I can't imagine a laser beam freezing up and falling to the ground.--Drowzycow (talk) 19:12, 20 November 2012 (CST)

ooh you can get rid the fish out for a better sentence,

the shot grazed her shoulder tip and cheek and continued going behind<---this is the idea.

her eyebrows come closer together get rid of the eyelids.

the ammunition implies to bullets and missiles not stated which they used so i picked the whole package. and the fire power= Gun powder not igniting soo......

--RikiNutcase (talk) 19:15, 20 November 2012 (CST)