Talk:Dai Densetsu no Yūsha no Densetsu:Volume 1 Chapter 1

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"That excessive amount of sweetness from her voice, even for Ryner, his heart skipped a beat." to "The excessive amount of sweetness from her voice, made even Ryner's heart skip a beat." - ArcherReborn2

"In the denominator of seconds, his killing intent towards her rose quickly --- in short, coming to a murdering level." I don't think denominator is a good word in this line. - ArcherReborn2

Please go ahead and make the changes. As long as the meaning and what the author intends to convey are not affected, they are not that major. :) --Larethian 05:38, 24 November 2010 (UTC)