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That sentence just seems wrong, but I don't know how to correct it. --[[User:Bilagaana|Bilagaana]] ([[User talk:Bilagaana|talk]]) 15:55, 11 January 2013 (CST) |
That sentence just seems wrong, but I don't know how to correct it. --[[User:Bilagaana|Bilagaana]] ([[User talk:Bilagaana|talk]]) 15:55, 11 January 2013 (CST) |
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| + | I suggest "Liliana was crouching down on one knee over the map." I'm also wondering about the sentence before that line. The part where it mentions the height and across. Wouldn't it be better to just say lengh and width, since the map is laid out on the ground.--[[User:Lighthalzen|Lighthalzen]] ([[User talk:Lighthalzen|talk]]) 08:41, 12 January 2013 (CST) |
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Liliana was crouching down while kneeling down on one leg on the map.
That sentence just seems wrong, but I don't know how to correct it. --Bilagaana (talk) 15:55, 11 January 2013 (CST)
I suggest "Liliana was crouching down on one knee over the map." I'm also wondering about the sentence before that line. The part where it mentions the height and across. Wouldn't it be better to just say lengh and width, since the map is laid out on the ground.--Lighthalzen (talk) 08:41, 12 January 2013 (CST)
