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Editing 剣神の継承者

Prologue of Vol 2

• The pale blue sky stretched for miles, with not a single cloud to be seen. --> The pale blue sky stretched for miles, without a cloud in sight. I guess that captures the 'feel' better?
• It was already past mid-May, the sunlight being glaringly bright and warm winds blowing about. --> It was already past mid-May, the sun being glaringly bright and warm winds blowing about.
• However, those phenomena would only last for the briefest of moments, and at this moment in time he hadn’t spotted anything out of the ordinary. --> However, those phenomena would only last for the briefest of moments and, until now, he hadn’t spotted anything out of the ordinary. (Just a suggestion) 'until now' seems to make the sentence 'flow' better compared to 'at this moment in time'.
• Kurou was currently in one corner of the academy he was attending as a student, a vibrantly viridian garden. --> Kurou was currently in a corner of the academy he was attending as a student, a vibrant viridian garden. I guess vibrant viridian(Viridian is a blue-green pigment, a hydrated chromium(III) oxide, of medium saturation and relatively dark in value.) garden makes more sense.
• There was a grove of trees in the deepest part of the garden, and that was the location of the small cottage in which he resided. --> There was a grove of trees in the deepest part of the garden, and that was the location of the small cottage where he resided. --> There were a grove of trees in the deepest part of the garden, which marked the location of the small cottage where he resided. (Though I prefer this suggestion more, it seems to change the meaning a little)
• Most importantly though, since it was within school grounds, commuting to school was a breeze. Coma there?
• Kurou suddenly came to a halt, placing his hand on the katana strapped to his waist. --> Kurou suddenly came to a haltand placed his hand on the katana strapped to his waist.
• Of course, his state of mind was prepared for anything to happen. --> Of course, he was mentally prepared for anything. 'His state of mind' sounds somewhat weird when used in that context.
• Where the grove opened up into a clearing, there was a girl who was putting her spirit into swinging her sword. Maybe instead of 'spirit' how about 'whole'?
• The sunlight streamed through her golden hair, which was tied in a sidetail, she was wearing a pale beige blazer, and the hem of her miniskirt was flapping about. --> The sunlight filtered through her golden hair, which was tied in a sidetail. She was wearing a pale beige blazer, and the hem of her miniskirt was flapping about.
• The blade of the sword she was wielding was broad and thick, and it was roughly as long as she was tall. --> The blade of the sword she was wielding was broad, thick, and roughly as long as she was tall.
• Just once look at it and it was clear that this sword was a genuine broadsword-esque blade. --> Just one look at it and it was clear that this sword was a genuine broadsword-esque blade.
• However, the blonde girl was handling it lightly—even wielding it single-handedly on occasion. --> However, the blonde girl was handling it lightly—even wielding it single-handedly occasionally.
• Her practice swings were stirring up wind in the grove, causing the trees to sway and their trunks to bend. --> Her practice swings were stirring up air in the grove, causing the trees to sway and their trunks to bend.
• It was scenery that didn’t look rooted in reality at all. --> It was a scene that didn’t look rooted in reality at all.
• Swordies could crush rock with their bare hands, and sprint faster than the wind. --> Swordies could crush rock(s?) with their bare hands and sprint faster than the wind.
• Above all else though, Swordies were a race that was proficient with the sword from the time they were born into the world. --> Above all else, Swordies were a race proficient in the sword since the time they were born into the world.
• Although appearance wise humans and Swordies looked alike, they were two completely different living organisms. --> Although, appearance wise, humans and Swordies looked alike, they were two completely different living organisms.
• “Speaking of which, you’re finally discharged. I was wondering how long you were going to spend being cooped up in there.” --> “Speaking of which, you’re finally discharged. I was wondering how long you were going to spend cooped up in there.”
• “I’m a human, you know. I got a deep gouging wound on my shoulder, not to mentioned I was slashed in various other places. The doctor remarked that the fact that I could be discharged in two week was already a miracle of sorts.” --> “I’m a human, you know. I got a deep wound gouged on my shoulder, not to mention that I was slashed in various other places. The doctor remarked that the fact that I could be discharged in two week was already a miracle of sorts.”
• There was some stiffness left in it, but it had roughly healed from the incident two weeks ago. --> It was still a little stiff, but it had roughly healed from the incident two weeks ago. (Makes more sense & a flows a little better)
• “Humans are such inconvenient creatures. Well, in anycase… W-w-w-w-el-co…” --> “Humans are such inconvenient creatures. Well, in any case… W-w-w-w-el-co…”
• Her skirt was dangerously short, till the point it barely concealed her panties. --> Her skirt was dangerously short, till the point where it barely concealed her panties.
• “That woman… Such a needless souvenir to leave behind.” --> “That woman… leaving such an needless souvenir behind.”
• She was currently missing, but even when she was gone she was still causing Kurou problems. --> She was currently missing, but even when she was gone she was still causing Kurou trouble.
• However, the building in front of Kurou was a brand new two storied house that looked like it had been prefabricated. --> However, the building in front of Kurou was a brand new two storey house that looked like it had been prefabricated. There should be a better word choice than 'prefabricated' ? How about preconstructed?
• Kurou nodded, chuckling wryly on the inside. It was hard to the academy to refuse any of Sefi’s requests. --> Kurou nodded, chuckling wryly on the inside. It was hard for the academy to refuse any of Sefi’s requests.
• Living together with Hinako was something that was unavoidable and he couldn’t cancel, but now that Sefi was living together with them… --> "Couldn't cancel"? There should a better phrase ...
• Kurou’s hand lightly touched the katana that was by his side. --> Did he take his katana off? Wouldn't "strapped to his side" (something like that) make a little more sense?

はじめ (talk) 01:32, 27 January 2014 (CST) Guess I finished editing the prologue (for now). Well, (once again) the above are just my suggestions.はじめ (talk) 01:32, 27 January 2014 (CST)

Chapter 1 of Vol 2

• Wearing the uniform of the academy, both hands were gripped tightly onto his sword as he lifted it into a raised position. Just my thoughts, but doesn't 'raised position' sound a little weird?
• Returning the sword to the raised position, he repeated swinging his sword. --> Returning the sword to the raised position, he repeatedly swung his sword. or maybe again he swung his sword?
• Within the Seven Swords, the most brilliant of them was given the title of Sword Saint. How about 'strongest' ?
• Kurou swung his blade down even harder. Wouldn't 'sword' make more sense instead of blade?
• There was a fine line between training and ruining his body. --> How about 'overexerting himself'?
• He could hear Sefi’s stream of abuse from behind the closed door. --> He could hear Sefi’s stream of insults from behind the closed door.
• ... with all his might as well as continued to stay inside the toilet, the fact that Sefi hadn’t resorted to violence was a reflection of her kind nature. Wasn't he in the washroom?
• When he finally noticed his surroundings, Hinako was already standing next to him, staring at Kurou intently. Wouldn't 'came to his senses' (or something like that) make a little more sense?
• Kurou was sitting right in front of the table at the center of the room. --> Kurou was sitting right in front of the table in the center of the room.

はじめ (talk) 06:38, 22 January 2014 (CST) Yeah, haven't quite finished editing this chapter. Well, the above are just my suggestions. Would you (Thatsjustpeachy) happen to be translating from a Chinese raw? There are a few sentences that seem to be a little awkward ... that aside, thanks for the effort you put into your translations and I hope that you continue to translate this LN. はじめ (talk) 06:38, 22 January 2014 (CST)

Kenshin no Keishousha

I just wanted to say thanks for the work your putting into your translations.

Thanks TJP for taking this project again. :) --Chancs (talk) 01:05, 12 November 2013 (CST)

I'll upload the image of volumes 2,3 after thursday (Due to important exam ) --Yoyoyo5678 (talk)

Thanks for picking Kenshin no Keishousha again and while I'm at it, making the volume 2 current content readable. :D Zeikuu (talk) 12:54, 14 November 2013 (CST)

I'm done with V2 but I am very sorry I messed up a little with the names of the Image --Yoyoyo5678 (talk)

I fixed the names. --Yoyoyo5678 (talk)

I'm done with V3 too --Yoyoyo5678 (talk)

Hoping to support your work as a editor

Hello thatsjustpeachy my user name is Tjobbear I am a inexperienced editor in baka-tsuki and yours translations are top notch I hope I can have permission to support you in your translations (even if it maybe only a little) on kenshin as a editor in the project.

Editing For Kenshin no Keishousha

I would like to register to be an editor. Are there any kind of requirements to meet? LT (talk)

Thank You!

Editing Kenshin

Hi I love your work on kenshin. I was just wondering, how do I become an editor? I promise my english good.--Hayashi s (talk) 18:51, 15 August 2013 (CDT)

You are an amazing translator! I thank you for finishing this great series! [Spirit of the books]