Talk:Madan no Ou to Vanadis:Volume 09 Chapter 2

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Setsuna, I'm going to try and point this out again and if you're adamant about it then I'll overlook it in the future but "floated a smile" sounds weird, why not just "smiled" or "gave a smile". Also "drop-out" soldiers sounds like deserting soldiers to me. Kuratatsu (talk) 10:53, 11 June 2014 (CDT)

Just "smile" will be good when there are no adjective (gentle smile or difficult smiel). How about "revealed a smile"? As for "Drop-pout", which word do you should replace it? Setsuna86 (talk) 14:16, 11 June 2014 (CDT)

'gave a smile'. Also for 'drop-out', why not 'deserting'. Drop-out sounds too... related to studies. I have encountered that word when talking about education. --Chancs (talk) 14:37, 11 June 2014 (CDT)

"Revealed a smile" also sounds great, anything but floated really, while for dropout I'd recommend using deserting. To be honest, that last document that I sent you had all these stuff fixed already and more but I guess you didn't noticed it. Kuratatsu (talk) 19:47, 11 June 2014 (CDT)

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